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Love Symphonic Day Decay ( #5 Aubade Challenge)
By mwhousemouse on 01/31/2011
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well done Mikey 


Written by Red Roses and Wine  (1/31/2011 12:38:37 PM)

Are you sure, you’re just merely learning this genre? Because if so, this is a very impressive attempt.

First of all, your imagery and verbiage was superb as usual. You turned on the romance switch on this one.

As for what the elements is concern, you met all the criteria.

(1) the morning departure ✓

(2) the alba alliteration ✓

(3) the dialogue aspect: you chose a monologue ✓

(4) the watch man warning personifies as” “love leaves create departing
dark” ✓

You even incorporated the Aubade’s lyrical nature into your imagery. Also checked ✓

Very well done Mike!

 

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Written by mwhousemouse  (1/31/2011 1:08:16 PM)

'Tis true, is you have brought me to this form. Until this challenge require my mind engage, I was unfamiliar with this form. I particularly enjoyed (from well known works) Shakespeare's Aubade #139.
And, as always, I love reading the examples provide here (on MoonTown). Thanks for your kind words in review & Sharing your knowledge with another fun challenge.
Love Ya Mucho Michael

 

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Written by JinglesMcFeelgood  (1/31/2011 9:12:53 PM)

I don't know. There are gems of phrase here but I want more of the story, I mean, it starts with singer in a pub (singer in a smoky room/smell of wine and cheap perfume - yes I started singing it) but other than the obvious leaving bit... I dunno what happened!

Jesica 

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Written by mwhousemouse  (1/31/2011 11:11:07 PM)

Thanks for the thoughts in review. I always appreciate your knowledge In your work & in your reviews.
Here the singing I am referring to began in the second half of the 18th century. Although, I am sure it is practiced today. Although, I know I observe Rabbie's work this time of year. In this piece I meant to compare songs in the pubs of Alba to poetry of the Bard bound in leaves or pages turned. Mix in libations (scotch in honor of Burns), stir in a woman of interest & let the passions flow. I am not sure this moment is more than a moment interrupted by the dawn. When words are thought then written then read, each time something new may be heard. I hadn't thought nor intended what you heard but now that you have shared I will have to read again.
Thanks Michael


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