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By Eco_de_lluvia on 01/29/2006
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good work 

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Written by Platypus  (1/29/2006 10:00:07 PM)

very haunting -- deserves several re-reads before rating.

good, but 

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Written by abstraction  (1/30/2006 12:58:34 AM)

"guess I know who is in charge now " - not enough reason for that line to be repeated - what has changed in the interim? I'm looking for more substance, even through the thicket of abstraction.

Thank you 

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Written by Eco_de_lluvia  (1/30/2006 7:03:30 AM)

Dadaism was what I was going for in this poem. What I really wanted to do was give the poem another title like A Chair Having a Conversation With a Peach.

thanks for the read and the critic.

eco

Da Da ist ? 

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Written by jch_dark  (1/30/2006 11:23:33 AM)

The problem I have with anyone claiming DaDaism is that the movement itself in visual was more concerned with tearing down the structure of visual art itself. Like most schools of art the poetry was similar to that goal, your work here is more political than an attempt at tearing down the world of free verse. There are more elements of Surrealism ( randomness of images ) than DaDa. I do like this work but I just cannot see it as DaDaist.

Thank you 

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Written by Eco_de_lluvia  (1/30/2006 1:54:10 PM)

Political? Wait a minute I just read the first stanza and I can see where you might think it is political...... no no no no no > man > Texas> no I did not have that in mind at all but if it works for you in that way, fantastic. I lived in El Paso TX most of my life and it was there I saw the first real person running naked in the street screaming in anguish, the person was deeply affected mentally and the last frontier the last border we can do away with are the restrictions imposed on our own bodies............

Thank you for the critique it is an eye opener!!!

eco

The " political " Element 

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Written by jch_dark  (1/30/2006 4:40:50 PM)

I did see JFK in Dallas more so than Bush in Crawford,Tx. As far as DaDaists please check out Charles Duchamp he really was the main catalyst for that movement. Also I liked their dark humor and sarcasm too.

Dada is both confrontational and fun... 


Written by mjreynolds  (1/31/2006 12:08:00 AM)

“The Dadaists are nothing, nothing, nothing, assuredly they will amount to nothing, nothing, nothing, signed Francis Picabia, who knows nothing, nothing, nothing.” This artist's comment is my favourite Dada quote...
Dada poetry is mainly cut-and-paste and fractured syntax to challenge your comfort in knowing what is poetry, but this does have a dada spirit.

I would use the line "guess I know who is in charge now" even more to increase the chaos: perhaps even throw a dart at the poem a few times and insert it wherever the dart lands...


A both confronting and stimulating piece. Well done.

Thank you 

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Written by Eco_de_lluvia  (1/31/2006 2:14:15 AM)

I want to thank you all for the critic>>>> mj thank you ever so much.... *eco is smiling*


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