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I will be back reading this again 
Written by Platypus (3/6/2006 4:22:13 PM)
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I am staring this 5 because 1st read -- with tired brain -- i FEEL this poem so "tenderly"
it may or may not need work -- I like it a lot though. |
excellent
Written by duchess (3/21/2006 5:15:39 PM)
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i wouldn't change a thing.
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Written by Platypus (3/22/2006 2:20:04 AM)
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finally got back to this with -- no interuptions !!!!
WOW. --- if i were inclined to fems, I would Wish I were Marina!!!!! excellent in all aspects of content and beautitfully written!!!
I especially like -- the divergence of YET linkage of JELLYFISH --Heads bob around us like jellyfish.
Stay calm. These are the musical curves
that the universe reads. My static tumbles forth
with all the definition of a joke. ### excellent
keep doing what you do so well -- take care Gayle |
outstanding.
Written by mjreynolds (3/23/2006 2:14:40 AM)
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the last stanza is a wonderful ending to a very good piece. |
This poem took me by surprise.. "For Marina"
Written by Eco_de_lluvia (7/22/2006 9:27:13 PM)
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The first Stanza sucked me in and I couldn't believe what I was reading. Congratulations the poem is so well written, excellent progression of images and word choice .... well impeccable ..... congrat's
eco |
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Written by julesbristol (7/23/2006 11:50:10 AM)
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very interesting - made me want to read and re-read again. |
Written by katmandu (11/27/2006 12:23:15 PM)
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misteries to be held is good |
Written by gwizardstar (11/28/2006 8:24:21 AM)
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got bored to long for my liking. |
Written by free2besassy (2/2/2007 9:36:08 AM)
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Beautiful poem and i love the last stanza....and so true.We allow our children to dream the world into anything they can dream up...only to police those dreams as they grow older. WE without really knowing it either fuel those dreams or kill them with our lack of faith.
Great poem....not to long ...just right |
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Written by Zyskandar A. Jaimot (2/5/2007 2:28:26 PM)
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i think the poem begins in the last two stanzas - the rest descriptive/image and tonality is merely filler for these two impressive stanzas. good job and impressive thoughts.zaj |
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