if i may be blunt. . .
Written by Morgan90210 (7/31/2013 9:28:08 PM)
||your poem is good,
it can be better,
if only you rewrite some glaring errors,
SOMETIMES I DON'T KNOW HOW
I'M FEELING FOR YOU,
sometimes don't know how i feel about you,
sometimes i don't know, if i feel for you?
I'M HOPELESS DEVOTED TO YOU,
hopelessly devoted to you
YOU ALL I THINK ABOUT,
you're / you are all i think about,
that will surely make your poem,
much more impactful with the effects
you are playing about. . . .
please forgive me for my blunt review
but i expect the same from others too.
your well wisher .
Written by robinkeanna (9/22/2013 7:00:35 PM)