assume the reader has read the begining
Written by Platypus (1/24/2006 10:51:59 PM)
Both work well
but assuming the reader has alraedy "GOT IT" from the "aged as the eyes beneath" line
it can live without the repeat
AND leaves something for the reader to "IMAGINE' & become very INVOLVED in the INTERPRETATION.
not everything has to be clear -- nor do we have to take out anything that brings us closer to our poems :-)
"She passes quickly
the girl's smiling youth
a heart transparent for worldview".