For one, I would not use all caps when writing. It lessens the value of the overall when critiquing a poem.
You have a good foundation, a great message (I can totally realte to this!). I would try to dig deeper tho' into some imagery. Watch your punctuation. Either follow the guidelines of good/ proper English or free flow but you seem to mix both.
Keep it up! I am enjoying what I am reading so far.