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Mark
By wbb1950 on 02/04/2009
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Written by Puppyluv  (2/5/2009 1:15:26 PM)

Such a sad poem. I have ecperienced the same feelings and wondered if Jarad had Known how much he was truly loved and missed, would he have done it anyhow? I guess we'll never know.

About the poem itself. I know the emotions with which you wrote, but using all caps made me have a hard time diferentiating emotion and the searing heart-hurt emotion in the lines:

Here is how I would have written your poem for Jarad. Please forgive me for this presumption, but it touched my heart and brought Jarad alive again for a few minutes.

If I had known how you must have felt
I would have tried to help,
imperfection is not bad
bit, sometimes, makes us sad
when we’re surrounded
by perceived perfection
and people without a clue,
who matter not.

I know not why you chose
death over life.
Did you know how my tears
would cascade,
tumbling down my face
with the aching of missing you?

I pray you’re in a peaceful place.
loving angels all around;
deeply breathe,
It’s over now
And
I
will
find
a
way
to endure.


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