Written by mslacuna (3/22/2009 2:38:18 AM)
I think this piece would do well if you did some revision and extended it a bit. I think that if you put it in stanza form then it would pack a bigger punch. I understand that you wrote it 5 years ago; but as one matures, so does one's words. This could be a more intense and intimate piece if you revisited it.