Free Poetry Contest
When we first met
work to be done
(6/16/2009 3:10:28 PM)
There were no fireworks, no bells rang
might work better as first line.
I'd get rid of extra words like articles the and a
If your going to use cliche's...use them, don't change things because you can't think of a rhyme
find something that will rhyme with hell didn't freeze for instance...
I like the idea of the poem and of using cliches as well...
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