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I'm Sorry
By aman3355 on 09/16/2009
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I'm Sorry 

Written by DesertBoyIan  (9/16/2009 10:36:08 AM)

Although I like the sentiment behind the poem, it needs some work - the rhyme is too sing song, switch it up a little, try rolling rhyme or even free verse, Also the "I'm sorry" at the beginning of EVERY line is way too repetitive ! Maybe list more things under each "I'm sorry" to make it less repetitive sounding. Sorry if I seem harsh, I'm just trying to help, it's not personal ! Peace - Ian

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