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The time stopper
By Stephen on 06/16/2011
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Written by A.J_Spunk  (6/19/2011 1:35:35 AM)

Its haunting tone slowly reeled me into the story you described, that of a man guilty of being bewitched by a woman's overwhelming beauty. Emotion and depth is present in every line and for that alone, I say bravo! Reading this, was an echanting experience and I thank you.

Only one thing I wasn't too sure about
"And staring in her eyes conflict with a threat"
-I don't quite get this line, is the narrator saying there is a threat in her eyes or that his staring into her eyes causes a threat? Try to re-word the sentence to make it more clear.



Written by A.J_Spunk  (6/19/2011 1:37:01 AM)

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