Written by Cervantes (8/30/2011 10:41:12 AM)
I like it. Even for a rhymning poem it has some punch. I didn't get lost in the rhymes too much. Even the old style writing and use of that language had my attention. It seemed to work in this piece for me. Tighten the middle stanza a little. Leaving I believe should be leaves. Then tighten up the rest of that stanza and you will have another strong poem.