Written by goodtobe58 (12/25/2016 6:12:43 PM)
This is poetry, do not use i for I. It is bad grammar. I know some poets of statue use this form, but it is bad writing. Another thing, be careful when to use its and it`s. You have used its here when you meant to write it`s. Always reread your poems to detect these kinds of mistakes that sometimes are due to carelessness than to anything else.