Sins of the Godly
Written by goodtobe58 (7/3/2017 11:48:39 AM)
||I want to start by pointing out this: a poem should not have meaning that only the poet can resolve. A poem if it is of any good, is not a riddle to be solved. This poem reads that way in many places. Also, the rhyme in many lines does not accomplish much. Yes, you want to rhyme, but at the expense of what? The beauty and meaning of the poem? I think not.
I could decipher a few things in the poem, but this is all that I could do.
When you write a poem, do not take for granted that what you see in it the reader also sees or can see. Of course your understand the poem. You are the one who wroted, but the reader, even if he or she is an experienced one, needs somethig to work with.
Review this poem. Try for clarity rather than rhyme and you will have a much better poem.
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Written by mreli (7/20/2017 5:50:16 PM)